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19 August 2007 @ 01:38 am
Drabble: Round b3 – Prompt: Sweet  
Title: Like Sharpened Feathers, It Falls
Rating: G
Genre: Het/Gen?
Characters: Akari, Hikaru
Summary: Sweet, he’d said.
WordCount: 168


Sweet, he’d said.

When they were young and he had yet to be consumed with interests she couldn’t fully share and with a fire so bright that she could finally understand how light could burn, before he entered a world she could not, passed doors barred her—before he’d tumbled from her grasp like a slick bar of soap clutched too tightly in too eager hands—they would attend lazy summer festivals and buy clouds of spun sugar. They’d share it, passing clumps back and forth, hands and mouths sticky and lips stretched wide. It had melted on her tongue and made her feel light and free. It had tasted like how she imagined flight would feel.

It felt nothing like how he shaped the word, apologies hiding in his eyes and tone. He looked at her with the ill ease he’d always had in such situations and a patience he had never shown in middle school.

“You’re sweet,” he said.

Sweet.

Like tea with too much sugar.

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ungalad: Igo Rabuungalad on August 19th, 2007 05:36 am (UTC)
This is so nice, I love all the feelings here. I liked it a lot. Thank you very much for sharing it with us.
fic by everysecondtuesdaytuesdayfic on August 19th, 2007 06:53 pm (UTC)
Thank you!
Luce Redissen4 on August 19th, 2007 07:21 am (UTC)
how light could burn

Ooh, nice turn of phrase.
fic by everysecondtuesdaytuesdayfic on August 19th, 2007 06:53 pm (UTC)
Thanks!
Nobody puts Qem in a corner.qem_chibati on August 19th, 2007 09:35 am (UTC)
I love your choice of words here. This is really good.
fic by everysecondtuesdaytuesdayfic on August 19th, 2007 06:53 pm (UTC)
Thank you!
J.J.idhren24 on August 21st, 2007 02:23 am (UTC)
This is bitter chocolate around something soft and rich; it leaves one full, chasing the echo of flavor, marveling.
fic by everysecondtuesdaytuesdayfic on August 21st, 2007 12:19 pm (UTC)
Oh, wow. Thank you.
Sivullinen: fangirl's languagesivullinen on August 26th, 2007 09:50 am (UTC)
I like this very much!
fic by everysecondtuesdaytuesdayfic on August 27th, 2007 08:48 pm (UTC)
Thank you!